No one likes to be criticized, but sometimes it helps you see what can be corrected. Here is some feedback I received about my paper from my critical friends.
Angela,
I read your paper, and I have a few questions.
So, you documented these technologies problems, but what was answer to these problems?
Did you have a specific path for improvement?
Did you start at a baseline and make improvements?
What did your AR Project do to improve these statistics?
This paper was well written and well documented. Hopefully this helps.
Curt Isakson
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Hi Angela,
I did look at your paper on Wednesday. The thing that stuck out right away was the lack of spacing between the sections. I would add that. Nothing else stuck out on a first glance. I will look more carefully.
Trina
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curtisakson@gmail.com to avpa33 <avpa33@gmail.com>
7:13am
Angela,
I read your paper, and I have a few questions.
So, you documented these technologies problems, but what was answer to these problems?
Did you have a specific path for improvement?
Did you start at a baseline and make improvements?
What did your AR Project do to improve these statistics?
This paper was well written and well documented. Hopefully this helps.
Curt Isakson
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Tdralus@gmail.com to avpa33 <avpa33@gmail.com>
7:05am
Hi Angela,
I did look at your paper on Wednesday. The thing that stuck out right away was the lack of spacing between the sections. I would add that. Nothing else stuck out on a first glance. I will look more carefully.
Trina
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Trina Dralus <tdralus@gmail.com> to avpa33@gmail.com
3:16pm
I have attached your paper with comments. Hope it helps. Love this project. Very interesting!
Happy Easter!
Trina
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Hi Angela,
I just came to visit my in-laws. I just saw your paper. I like your topic. It is very interesting. What I would suggest is to write your name under the title. I also noticed that you wrote Methods instead of Methodology. I also understand we should have conclusions from the Literature Review and Results from the AR.
Well, everything depends on where you are going to publish your AR. I would suggest to look at their requirements and then do the corresponding changes.
Good luck!
Have a great week!
Sandra
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Hi Angela,
I just came to visit my in-laws. I just saw your paper. I like your topic. It is very interesting. What I would suggest is to write your name under the title. I also noticed that you wrote Methods instead of Methodology. I also understand we should have conclusions from the Literature Review and Results from the AR.
Well, everything depends on where you are going to publish your AR. I would suggest to look at their requirements and then do the corresponding changes.
Good luck!
Have a great week!
Sandra
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